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I need to escape,

I need to be free.

I must surely run wild.

I long to laugh and see.

Run, run I shall run out of fear.

I will flee from the threat.

I shall go far not near.

A place that is safe,

That is what I need.

I need no familiar face

So, I take off with speed.

Forget what I have left

For it is surely gone.

Time is running out,

They will be awakened by dawn.

So, I gather my things

And swiftly go away.

There's nothing left for me here

And no reason to stay.

But I'll admit, I'm glad that I'm free.

After years of being controlled, I can finally be me.

                                            ~M.E.B.~
                                            08-02-12
The above deviation is an entry to the ESCAPE Contest hosted and organized by #creativitytoconcept

[link] Here is the link to the journal if you guys wish to join. :D

Well it said that I should write about... two sentences on how this portrays escape...so... here goes:

The way this portrays escape is very straightforward and direct to the point. This are the words of a person bereft of freedom and love. The person is saying that he wants to be free of the bonds of which he is a captive. That's all.:D

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Another poem from my harrowed up emotions and problems. Thank God writing was invented! Thank you for reading! :D

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NaturalDreamer18 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Hey there. I am doing a YouTube channel of Let's Reads and I was wondering if I can narrate this piece? I will give you credit of course. I await your reply.

Have a good day. ^^
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's okay. But I want a reply of the link of your video :D I want to watch it too...if it's not too much trouble ^^;
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:iconnaturaldreamer18:
NaturalDreamer18 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
[link]

There you go and it was no problem at all. ^^
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:iconmebwrittings:
MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Eh? I don't see my piece here ^^;
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:iconnaturaldreamer18:
NaturalDreamer18 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
Oh! jsahdkjsahdkjsad I thought you meant that you wanted an example first before I read your piece. I'm so sorry. ;w; I misunderstood the text. |||OTL
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Demon-pony64 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Photographer
Good
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:iconthewitchofgrich:
theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
lovely
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:iconme2smart4u:
Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this piece is strong and the contrast sets the mood for the whole poem
....each painted word is very well written :boogie:
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:icon10darkknights:
10DarkKnights Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very very nice, check out my 2 poems
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:iconzara-a-tryste:
zara-a-tryste Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Student Writer
Those are my exact thoughts right now. What are you, psychic?
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:iconmebwrittings:
MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ahahaha... I don't know. I wrote this about a month ago though ^^; But I feel you man... I feel you :huggle:
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:iconzara-a-tryste:
zara-a-tryste Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Student Writer
Ah...precognition ;) Nice. It's really well-written by the way. I like it.
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:iconmebwrittings:
MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! Glad you did :D
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:iconzara-a-tryste:
zara-a-tryste Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome.
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:iconzara-a-tryste:
zara-a-tryste Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Student Writer
Ah...precognition ;) Nice. It's really well-written by the way. I like it.
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Student Writer
it was good:) i like your use of rhyme and rhythm
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:iconzrd1166:
zrd1166 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Student Writer
i really loved this poem its style is fantastic and i could totally get the emotions! i really love it, thanks for posting
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mockingbird250 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
Beautiful
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LetsStareAtClouds Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how you channeled your emotions so effectively through your writing. Great job =D
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h2ogirl98 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student Writer
I love it, I truly understand. Thank you for writing this.
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:iconmebwrittings:
MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure :tighthug:
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black3825 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
And I Raaan, I ran so far awaaay!
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:iconmebwrittings:
MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
O__O *stare*
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:iconblack3825:
black3825 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
You don't know that song?

Well that's sad.
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:iconmebwrittings:
MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh! I know that song! Hahaha...sorry I'm kinda slow ^^;
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DokiFanArt Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Digital Artist
aba! Nice one!!! haahahaha
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Freedom-Dreamer Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You captured this feeling so well. I can totally relate to this.
Good job. :)
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MouseMaster42 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I really liked this. :) Keep it up.
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Rovaa Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist
How I feel in the middle of the semester. *sigh* :( Thought I know my escape lies beyond highschool, so I need to continue this battle!!! Only three more years now! :) Favourite'd! ^__^
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wolvenassassin88 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very emotionally expressive. brilliant. :D
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Hardly-Crazy Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
This is very good! I like it ^^
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student General Artist
:heart:
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mandy-mythos Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
Oh, yes. The road to freedom is paved with many hardships.
And this poem illustrates that well.
I know the emotion depicted in this all too well.
Freedom is something very hard to obtain. Even after years upon years of trying, I'm still not truly free.
I can easily picture the struggle and the heart-break that this poem captures so well.
You are talented, I must say.
I will definitely have to give some of your other pieces a gander.
I love the style of this, as well.
Short one-lined sentences is an interesting way to write.
So, I applaud on a job well done. You deserve many favorites on this piece. :)
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MeghanLindsey Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012   Writer
ohh, this speaks to me. :heart: I fought for my freedom, and this reminds me of myself.
wonderful. :clap:
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