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I know that is is kind of weird

But I felt that I should write this down.

I need to tell you what I feel

And tell you what he means to me.

He's my best friend and he's a good man.

Please, give him the love and respect he deserves.

He may seem goofy but he's very sweet.

I know this because he was always there for me when I was sad.

Now, I know that you're not bad

Cause he would never choose someone who's mean.

But I still want to tell you just in case you forget in the future;

Please don't break his heart.

He's been through so much

And he doesn't deserve something like that.

He is the kind of person who smiles even when he's hurt by others

And would take any pain for the people he loves.

I know, I've witnessed it.

I know he may seem kind of childish sometimes

But don't let it get to you.

It's just his way of expressing himself. 

He's very caring and I'm sure he'll do anything to make you happy.

He doesn't look like it but he's very kind and thoughtful.

He'll put your needs before his, I'm sure.

You don't know how lucky you are that he's chosen you.

To find someone like my best guy friend in the whole world is like finding a rare diamond.

Take care of him for me.

You have the one thing I can never have...

His heart

I would have made it longer but I felt that it would be too long.  Oh well....let the art flow. Please comment and thank you for reading :wave:

Some of my other works you might like:

CinderellaCinderella, tell me please ,what's wrong?
All the happiness from your face is gone.
Did the ball last night really end up that bad?
I don't like seeing you looking so sad.
Cinderella, let down your hair.
And I'll put in little braids over here and there.
Cinderella, no please don't cry.
I don't wanna see tears fall from those pretty blue eyes.
Cinderella, let me hold your hand.
If you just tell me I'll understand.
Lean on my shoulder as the night slips away.
I'll hold you close till the break of day.
Cinderella, let me comfort you.
I want to let you know that you're pretty too.
Is it because he didn't give you a chance? 
Put your slippers back on and I'll give you a dance.
Let's dance the night and your sorrows away.
I  promise you that I will always stay.
FlashbacksIt was a harsh a lonely winter 
And I was all alone that day.
Snowflakes were falling on my hair
As I saw people go their way.
Sitting on the swing with nothing else to do.
Yes I remember it so well, that was the day that I met you.
And it all comes back in sparkling and grand flashbacks. 
I was impressed by your intelligence 
And how carried yourself so well.
I was trying to hide that fact 
But I'm pretty sure that you could tell.
As my eyes grew wider because of how you moved so flawlessly.
And as I recall that night I was too infatuated to fall asleep
And it all comes back in sparkling and grand flashbacks.
Life went on and on
And it was great to be with you.
Even if I could go back in time
It's still you that I would choose.
Because every moment was magical 
And I felt that I could fly.
I still feel the same way now
Even though you went and said good-bye.
And it all comes back in sparkling and grand flashbacks.
Now I found a dream that must come true.
Is it too much to ask?I don't understand what's wrong with me today.
It feels like all my of friends have drifted too far away.
I've tried to be strong and fix all I've wronged
But nothing goes according to plan.
And I just want to back up, stop and start over again.
And these days are the loneliest of my life.
It feels like something is wrong but everything seems alright.
Are they trying to avoid me because of being me?
The past is the past but I hope I'm not history...
All I want is someone to talk and stay...with me.
Is it too much to ask for a little time and company?
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Hi, dear. Here is a review by daddy, and don't worry.

Right away, I noticed definite free verse. As we know, that is usually verse devoid of rhyme and meter, and is the style of the times apparently. This appears to be a kind of letter and its expression is suitable. There are only two things I would suggest, from the viewpoint of a writer. First, consider changing the start of the poem. Different words, if you can think of them, to suggest how strange you feel asking the favor, and second, perhaps removing "he may seem goofy." Otherwise it was well-done and the ending was good.
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Critique by PatternVSUser Apr 17, 2014, 6:05:23 AM
There isn't much to say about the techique so I'll get it over with quickly: It's a straightforward free verse where the words just flow. It doesn't try to creatre new structures or rhythm but it's not stiff either. It flows well like a speech in the end of a dramatic movie, and what we're left with is the content, the heart of this thing.

This is a very mature way to deal with break up. It's not until the last line we understand the narrator is heartbroken himself, but instead of being angry at the heartbreaker she wants to protect him. She knows that even though he doesn't return that kind of love to her, he's not a terrible person. She knows that just as he broke hers he had his own broken a few times too. Instead of hoping he'll be rejected again and maybe decide to be with her, she hopes it will work for him. This is very mature, accepting the absurdity of love and still loving somebody despite the heartbreak - because you can get over it and still stay friends. I did that.
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014   Writer
this length is the perfect length.
JamieDyas Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Could people please check out my writing and give their opinions...? Also, this really spoke to me. I loved it. Ironically found it when my friend was going through something similar. Nice work. 
SaxonPride Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
This makes me horribly sad. Friends can love one another, too. And if a friend doesn't love you as much as some flash-in-the-pan romantic partner, they're not worth your time. Who is there through everything? Your friend. Through break-ups and squabbles and loneliness, they're always there, and then just get thrown away and ignored when a pretty face shows up.
A friend is not an inconvenience, a friend is not a commodity, a friend is not a possession to be put on a shelf to gather dust or thrown away when it's convenient. It's high time we all realised that the human heart is big enough to accommodate the platonic and the romantic, they're both equal.
If someone does all that for you, loves you, cares for you, and still has no claim to your heart - they're no friend and they're no person worth a damn.
KawaiiKoneko97 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is amazing. <3 Very well-written; I love it. :heart:
Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Professional Writer
Daddy is pleased that you're writing again.let it all out.
jayscriminal Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful ~
KiraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This makes me think of me and my best guy friend. Ilove it~
Gale-OneOfMany Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, the familiar feelings. I remember feeling the exact same way when I realized I had to give my best friend away like that. It had never been me, so I just had to let her go, and ask the guy to take care of her, and love her like she deserved. Wonderful piece.
CityWerewolf Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Student General Artist
this is beautiful 
SignatureFeather Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014   Digital Artist

All of this and i can't find a simple favorite button!
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