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For my grandma
"I love you to the moon and back"
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12 years ago...



I remember you told me that you loved me


And how you carried me when I was three.


I remember your tight hugs


And your your white gloves


And wondering what I was gonna be.





12 years later...



I'm walking down a narrow hallway.


I'm still thinking of what I'm gonna say.


And it hurts me deep inside.
                     

And as I walked though that wide door,


I almost hit the floor.


But I just closed my eyes and sighed.





4 days ago...




So many tubes are connected,


This is not what I expected.


Right then and there I had to cry.


You eyes weren't even open.


My heart was absolutely broken


As I watched your pain and kept asking "Why?"





Yesterday...



I couldn't even look at you


And everyone felt it too.


You were starting to fade away.


My heart was beating like crazy.


Everything went hazy.


Still I wanted you to stay.






A few hours ago...



They said you weren't moving where you lay


And that you already passed away.


I was thinking it was all a joke.


But then it was all true


And I started to grieve for you.


All my hope went up in smoke.






Right now...



I've left so many things unsaid.


Now I stare at your empty bed.


Wish I could have said "I love you"

                             ~M.E.B~
                             12-06-12
This is my submission for Round 2 of The "Scratch that contest"
This is dedicated to my grandmother who just passed away this morning. Thanks for reading! Please comment( it is much appreciated rather than faves)

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crshh Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
:hug:
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ButterflyAnaes Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I am so sorry for your loss. :huggle:
I can relate; even though I lost my grandmother about 4 years ago, the pain still lingers. (She left us the day after Christmas...we had an uncle, also, who passed away on Christmas Eve of '95.) :sniff:

You will get through this; I promise!
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organblower Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is excellent. Emotionally charged. Most people can relate to it if they lost someone near and dear. I just opened a new folder at CrazyTeenPhotography for literature and your work impressed me. I hope it will attract other writers.
Sorry for your loss.
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I appreciate your comment and concern. So glad I impressed you too.
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Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I read through this very well written piece
it truly has a very deep and powerful flow
I deeply feel the true emotions expressed.....
I enjoyed each painted word ... :nod:
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :huggle:
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Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
most welcome :hug:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Writer
I thought Scratch That wanted positive poems?

But I digress; I found this poem pretty powerful. The underlining of the times emphasizes how fast it is happening, and the whole feeling of panic and rushing.

Very sorry for you loss by the way :(
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
They do? Oh no... I think I'll get disqualified ^^; Oh well... I'm still glad of this poem. And thank you for calling my poem powerful. That's very nice of you :huggle:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Student Writer
Well, kit was only overly-depressing poems, and this does have a bittersweet edge to it, so I think they will allow it. :-p
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I hope so too! Thank you :huggle:
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Grady226 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
More please. P.S. still crying. These poems are really cute and sad. I was just told that my grandma only has a month to live. She is in the hospital lying on her death bed. She can't even feed herself.
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Be strong... If you need someone to talk to just message me. Here for you :cling:
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Grady226 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Thanks. You're one of the kindest deviants I've ever chatted with. Thanks for being a good friend. It's nice to talk to someone that knows what I'm going through.
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VanitasRocks Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, this is simply incredible. I'm sure she knows just how you feel, and your memories will always be sweet. I wish you the best! Great piece!
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you... :huggle: Your concern is much appreciated.
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VanitasRocks Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student General Artist
No problem! :)
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overdestiny Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This takes the cake for the most emotional and touching piece in the round! It's so strong it changes a person's mood :0
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It does? I'm glad. It was felt when written and cherished when done. I just hope I don't get disqualified for it ^^;
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BlackWings101 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
*sigh* i know how you feel...
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:cling:
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SourAir Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so sad, it literally made me cry reading it... :'( It's very well written, and I am so, so sorry for your loss. :huggle:
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry... didn't mean to make you cry ^^; Thanks so much for the concern and everything! It is much appreciated :huggle:
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SourAir Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, don't worry about it! ^^ It was really emotional is all.. And it's no problem at all! I hope your grandmother rests in peace. :heart:
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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Elaine-Moon Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know how you feel- my grandmother passed away recently. But this is a great poem!
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm sorry for your loss... :cling:
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authorofthings Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
i'm sure she knows even without you saying it. at least she has been relieved off her pain and is currently resting in peace, don't you think?
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes... I guess it's better this way. I hated to see her in pain. I knew in myself that she was going away but that still doesn't make it easier to accept. Although, I'm starting to feel a little better now since I've written down my feelings and I don't see her in pain. Thanks for the concern and the comment! Much appreciated! :huggle:
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authorofthings Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
yeah, i'm glad you're feeling better :aww: and no problem :)
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moonlightflower99 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
I hope your grandma rests in peace!
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MEBwrittings Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :huggle: I hope so too.
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